Read the excerpt from a student’s essay.


As Rainsford enters the dining room, he immediately becomes aware of Zaroff’s expensive and sophisticated taste. He notes the decorations, the food, the drink, all of which are exquisite and advertise Zaroff’s privileged aristocratic upbringing. Rainsford is initially impressed by the general’s home and finds him to be a "thoughtful and affable host.”


Which revision would best help expand the ideas in the excerpt?

Aadding some of the dialogue between Rainsford and Zaroff

Badding that Rainsford comes from a privileged background as well

Cadding that the residence is situated on a wild overgrown island

Dadding a more-detailed description of the decorations, food, and drink